Persuasion Map

Ciao viewers,

We have been doing persuasive writing for this term. We have done different persuasive writing planner things. This one was called a persuasion map. It was on a site that was on the room 9 site.

There was a slide that we chose an idea from. Sorry it is kind of hard to read, the picture wasn't the best.

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The saviours

Ciao viewers this term we have been learning how to write narrative stories. The purpose of a narrative story is to satisfy and entertain the reader. We had to first plan our narrative story in a story planner. We had to write the characters, setting, middle, start, end, problem and solution. Then we started writing our story, we had to include punctuation, simile's, descriptive words, onomatopoeia, personification and you couldn't have happy, went and big or said but you could have said with something. My favorite sentence is, it was the worst stench ever. 

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Narrative organizer

Bula viewers, we have been doing narrative organizer. Which is where we need to write all the characters, the setting, the problem, the beginning, the middle, the solution and the end. We first did one about a fairy tale then we had to do a haunted forest story. Now we are doing a story from a folder and next where going to do our own story. 

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Broken Paper, Scissors, Rock

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Our class has been doing descriptive writing. We have been writing it about an animation. It was called Broken Paper Scissors Rock. We had to do a brainstorm on things like their personalities and looks. We also had to do parts that happened to the characters and what that makes you think they are like that.

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Opening sentence for my story.

hello readers, we are learning to write and interesting first sentence to hook our readers.

My starter sentence 'I was on roblox and got 5000 dolars'.

This is my improved second 'bang boom pew pew bam rattat , there were flashing light’s, I was so engrossed in the game'.

I think my updated sentence is more interesting.

Do you think my updated sentence better.

returning to school

Talofa lava readers, I am going to share my first draft of some writing. I have done some writing I have done writing about returning to school. our teacher gave us some instructions to write about how we were feeling about returning back to school. Could you please tell me if there is anything, I could do to improve my writing?

All about me

Kumasta my name is Leo. I go to an Hornby primary school. My favorite food is sushi And pepperoni pizza and lollies.my favorite school subject is math and reading. In my spare time I like to play basketball. My favorite Animals are leopards. My favorite game is roblox. I live with my mum and dad And sister i grew up in Kaipoi. I am in a year 4/5 class with 29 lovely students. I have 1 cat called Arthur and 1 rabbit called Mr Tibbles. Thank you for reading my post. Please feel free to write a positive, helpful and thoughtful comment.

My music story starter 2

I chose levels because it was my favorite song.

My music story starter

In room 9 we have been doing a music story. I chose So Good To Me because it looked like an easy one to do. I hope you enjoy my story

Leo fisherman

My diving story

I'm going for a swim. I put on all my diving gear. This is so fun.

I found a lost city. “Oh my gosh!” It looked so cool.

I’m going in the haunted lost house. I found a broken door. I swam inside.

Wait -  treasure!!!!  I’m going to be rich. Wait……. it might be a trap like in the movies.
I need to swap the treasure with something. Ok let’s try this rock. Oh no it didn’t work!
Swim fast. AHHHHHHHHHHH.

I am lucky I survived. I’m going to swim to the surface and I’m going to buy a mansion.